Go back through your essay. In every sentence where you have told the judges something, is there a way to show by example? Consider the following.
My family does not have a lot of money. I worked my way through high school at Walmart.
This is a good piece of information to share. However, the message can be made more vivid by sharing more detail.
My family does not have a lot of money. I worked at the local Walmart most evenings and did my homework on the bus ride home or after work.
Much better. Now the judges know that you were very busy and can feel the squeeze of needing to earn money and still get your schoolwork done. One more time.
The scholarship essay is by far the most difficult part of the application. You have overcome the biggest obstacle to applying for a scholarship.
Before we go any further, we should be clear on one point: regardless of the theme of the scholarship essay, Wilkie Collins or anything else, the essay is really about you. Clearly, Signet wants to encourage enjoyment of the classics, but more than anything else, the judges want to know about you, your thoughts, your beliefs, and your ideas.
Most Students Don’t Know How to Start the College Scholarship Essay…
Guess what? Getting started is sometimes the most difficult part of writing for professional writers as well. However, never start writing without doing a couple of things first.
Understand the purpose of the writing and the motivation of the askers
To convince the reader(s) to give you $$ so the essay actually has a thesis:
“You should award this scholarship money to me because”… (avoid merely creating a list of how / why you meet the criteria). Instead write an essay that supports a unique thesis that qualifies you and gives the readers a sense of who you are as person and as an academic. Try to make them excited to give you money.
Some may argue that you should develop a theme for your essay and then write goals. We believe that the opposite is true. When you read an essay question, it may be immediately apparent to you that the theme, or the message that you want to convey, has to do with your commitment to the healing profession as an extension of your desire to better people’s circumstances. Wonderful! However, if the theme of your essay is not immediately clear, break down the work by establishing a set of goals based upon your understanding of the essay’s intent and the mission of the funding organization. These goals may lead you to one or more themes for your essay. In the set of goals above, the theme that may be emerging from the goals is an appreciation for the family or the team as a cornerstone to individual and group success. You can use your experience as a club leader in developing a team approach, and your decision to ask members of your family to be on your college team to proofread, edit, and search for opportunities as ways to show that you value working relationships and your leadership style will be successful in inspiring group success.
Developing a college scholarship essay can be intimidating. Anne Lazaroney, a guidance counselor, says that students don’t know how to begin writing essays, and they are intimidated by the competition, figuring that they can’t possibly write well enough to win anyway, so why bother?
Let’s look at the facts. You are graduating high school, right? Some educators apparently believe that you are capable of putting together coherent thoughts on a piece of paper. Plus, we already know that 90 percent of the people who apply – valedictorians, creative writing gurus, school paper journalists, and just plain folks – have already failed to get to the finalist circle because they messed up the application. This information suggests that you probably have a decent chance at winning a scholarship if you put your mind to it.